Then all the dead opened their cold palms
and released the snow; slow, slant, silent,
a huge unsaying, it fell, torn language; settled,
the world to be locked, local; unseen,
fervent earthbound bees around a queen.
The river grimaced and was ice.
thought the dead, using the snow-
but where you are, offering the flower of your breath
to the white garden, or seeds to birds
from your living hand. You cannot leave.
Tighter and tighter, the beautiful snow
holds the land in its fierce embrace.
It is like death, but it is not death; lovelier.
Cold, inconvenienced, late, what will you do now
with the gift of your left life?
Still beautiful language. Haven’t managed to read enough of it yet to have an opinion, but I’m pretty sure from the first line that it’ll be good. She is always so individual, which is how I aim to be when I write. I don’t ever want to use a cliche, I want to talk about how it really feels.